Untitled Poem

Untitled Poem

asherz's picture

I am neither awake nor dead,

tied up on this bed.

I cannot feel my head, 

they've only given me bread.

I should have known being so well-read,

that my fate had been 'foresaid.

I once fled,

after me he sped.

Since I've been kept in this shed,

feeling sore and unfed.

Nights like these it goes unsaid,

that I'd be better off dead. 

 

 

 

 

 

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twistedstoryteller123's picture

I like it. It's eerie and tells a story. Good job.

EternalMysteria's picture

How could you have been unfed, and given bread?

asherz's picture

Was saying they wouldn't feed me after I tried to leave and thank you Twisted<3

twistedstoryteller123's picture

You're quite welcome :)

littleboo's picture

Great, tells a story. Draws you in and makes you want to read more. Thanks for sharing.

joestoutenger's picture

This is great...love this kinda stuff...I hope you are going to do more..I like the ones that are simple and to the point..great job...you keep writting em and I'll keep reading...Peace...Joe

TheGirl's picture

I couldn't focus because the rhyme scheme was soooo distracting. If you switched it up a bit I think it would improve it a bunch. Good though.

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